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Practice Editing Here (Nov 23rd in-class Wiki session work)

 * This is a place to practice clicking the "edit" button and practice adding references (via the citation button).                  Project title: Cirrhosis

Assignment # 3
Note: You will be emailing your assignment # 3 directly to your tutor, however, please paste a version here that excludes your personal information. This will allow us to support your efforts on Wikipedia prior to editing "live" in the article.

The following is a copy and paste of my email submission for Assignment #3:

The definition of undifferentiated liver cirrhosis in the article is located in the article’s first two sentences and reads as follows: '''“Cirrhosis, also known as liver cirrhosis or hepatic cirrhosis, is a condition in which the liver does not function properly due to long-term damage. This damage is characterized by the replacement of normal liver tissue by scar tissue”'''.


 * Written in this ambiguous manner, one could perceive that the condition of cirrhosis causes or leads to the damage causing the scar tissue itself; in fact it is the opposite in which progressive scar tissue leads to cirrhosis.  Furthermore, the article contains the interchanging terms ‘scar’ and ‘fibrosis’ a total of four and 14 times, respectively.  Although these terms are interchanged as they are referring to one in the same thing, it is not once clearly stated as such for unaware readers.  It can be expected that the average grade 8 reader knows what a scar is, but not what fibrosis means.  The term fibrosis is not Wiki-linked in this article either, which when not otherwise defined, this should be considered as it is a medical term that would not necessarily be common to many potential readers.

“Cirrhosis, also known as liver cirrhosis or hepatic cirrhosis, is a condition in which the liver does not function properly due to long-term damage. Scar tissue formation, known as fibrosis, is formed during the process of liver tissue repair ''. undefinedIt is the presence of significant fibrosis from chronic liver damage and subsequent repair that in time can lead to cirrhosis'' ”
 * To remedy the above listed deficiencies in effort to provide better definition clarity, it is proposed that the second sentence of the article be removed completely and be replaced by 2 new sentences.  These would capture the term fibrosis and how it is this scarring, when advanced, that is involved in the development of cirrhosis. The proposed entry (in italics) with the original first sentence would read as follows:


 * I have chosen the book Sherlock’s Diseases of the Liver and Biliary System, 13th edition as my reference to support the information contained in the proposed changes.  This resource is current and was last updated in 2018.  Page 82 of this book contains the necessary background information that is presented in a clear and concise manner and is more thorough than other consulted resources, especially regarding the definition of fibrosis and it’s relation to cirrhosis; which is the aim of this proposed change.  Furthermore, this is a reliable secondary source which interprets and summaries many primary sources to address the various components of cirrhosis.  It is a well-recognized academic and peer reviewed publication in which further background reading and in speaking with my tutor, it seems as though this is a go-to for learning about liver disorders by some in the medical field. As well, it has met the rigorous criteria for inclusion into the National Center for Biotechnology Information's (NCBI) resource listings, the NCBI's site is HONcode certified.  All factors considered, there were no identified biases or reasons to avoid the use of this reference textbook for the purpose of this proposal.  It is recognized that textbooks are replaced every so many years with added, improved or updated content as necessary and as such, some of their information may be out of date by the time they are accessed by readers if it has been years since publishing.  This could be a concern for fast changing topics, but this is not a concern in this case. The proposed definition of cirrhosis and the fact that scarring of the liver is referred to as fibrosis is a well-known, undisputed fact.

Planned Wiki Talk page insert summarizing the above:

We noted that the definition of cirrhosis lacks a clear linkage to fibrosis as being the condition’s causative factor; nor is the medical  term fibrosis defined or wiki-linked for despite appearing multiple times throughout the article. In order to provide clarity and better understanding of the topic, we propose to remove the article’s second sentence, "This damage is characterized by the replacement of normal liver tissue by scar tissue" and replace it with "Scar tissue formation, known as fibrosis, is formed during the process of liver tissue repair ISBN 978-1-119-23756-3.  It is the presence of significant fibrosis from chronic liver damage and subsequent repair that in time can lead to cirrhosis ISBN 978-1-119-23756-3.”

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page?

 * This will also be covered on Nov 23rd in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template