User:Steveh1966/Me Before You (film)/Infinite Writers Peer Review

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Steveh1966


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 * Me Before You (film)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Me Before You (film)

Lead
Needs Improvement:

-The first sentence could be rephrased. I do not like the " her 2012 novel of the same name." I think it sounds a bit off.

-You could add an additional sentence of detail about what the book is about. Keep this very brief.

-Might need some more citations! I would double check that.

Looks good (in my opinion):

-Includes the main actresses/actors names

-Includes the director and authors names and filming locations

Content
Needs Improvement:

-Needs a lot more information in the plot. I would consider adding more detail about the following characters/events:

- Patrick (Lou's boyfriend)

-Lous's family and Homelife and more emphasis on how different that is in comparison to Will's life (before the accident and after).

- Describe the event when Lou first meant Will and compare it to the last event they shared together (the vacation). I think these are two key events that could use more

detail. They are huge part of the plot/storyline.

-Consider adding more sections to make the organization clearer (Setting, Characters (not just the actors/actresses), Brief background of the story, etc.).

Looks good (in my opinion):

-I think the current plot is well written and organized. It's concise and easy for the reader to understand.

Tone/Balance
Overall, I believe the article does keep a neutral tone. So, that is something you shouldn't have to worry about as a writer editing. Just make sure you maintain a neutral tone while working on this article.

Organization
As mentioned under content, I would considering adding more sections into the article. In my opinion, it could benefit from a section on characters and a setting section.

Images/Media
I would definitely include more images! The movie has tons of great scenes with beautiful scenery. A photo of one of those filming locations and of Will and Lou together would be a good idea.

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