User:Steven Jenkinss/Start school later movement/Habtcnj Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Steven Jenkinss
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Steven Jenkinss/Start school later movement
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Start school later movement

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I have reviewed your recently edited Wikipedia article, and I believe my feedback can be valuable for potential improvements. The introduction regarding the conducted study is partially clear in conveying its nature and outcome. However, I couldn't find a clear link between the subtopic "Shifted circadian rhythm and sleep deprivation" and the article's content. The two sources used are credible and reliable. The information provided appears to be accurate. You maintained a neutral point of view by incorporating different viewpoints.

It is recommended to work on improving the writing style and language clarity. I noticed some grammar, spelling, and punctuation errors that can be rectified. Utilizing connecting phrases to refine the flow between points would contribute to a smoother reading experience. Additionally, the article would benefit from proper formatting in line with Wikipedia guidelines. Incorporating appropriate headings and subheadings would improve the organization of content. The aforementioned errors and lack of clear structure somewhat hindered understanding of the information presented.

In conclusion, refining the article through proper formatting, expanding supporting evidence, and expressing ideas more clearly would significantly strengthen the topic.