User:Stormchaser909/Aristagoras/Coolbutterfly Peer Review

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Stormchaser909
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 * User:Stormchaser909/Aristagoras:
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 * Aristagoras

Lead
I liked the lead but I think that you should add some sources to it because there is no source for the entire thing. Maybe one paragraph would be a good goal to get the lead down to because it seems a bit too long? It is overly detailed at times and some of the background could probably go into the background section.

Clarity of Article Structure
The sections that you have are organized in a sensible manner. But because you are missing such large parts of the article it is hard to know for sure if the organization makes sense. If you are planning on having the same layout as the original article I think that would make sense.

Coverage Balance
The length of each section does not equal its importance because I think the Ionian Revolt and the Siege of Naxos are the most important events for Aristagoras but they get no coverage so far in the article. Many of the sections that were in the original Wikipedia page are not in your draft so I think that you should include all if not most of them. No sections seem unnecessary or off-topic. There are no conclusions that could be drawn from reading this article

Content Neutrality
I think that the content is neutral and does not show me the perspective of the author based on reading it.