User:Stormchaser909/Aristagoras/Lemurcat111 Peer Review


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(Stormchaser909)
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Stormchaser909/Aristagoras
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Aristagoras

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section


 * I think your lead section could use some citations interspersed with the information
 * Overall good lead that explains in summary who Aristagoras was and why they are of historical note
 * I think the lead section definitely leads well into your body paragraphs as you mention but don't go into extreme detail about how Aristagoras went to mainland Greece to ask for assistance but then you go onto to go in further detail later in the body paragraph section.

Clarity of article structure

I think that just like the current public article you could make the Spartan refusal to provide assistance its own subheading and that could help with the structure of your article.

Coverage balance

I think you have good coverage since you begin talking about aristagoras right when the historical record begins to know of him.

Content Neutrality

overall you have a super informative competent lead section maybe the change from calling Aristagoras a leader to a tyrant may be iffy on the neutrality part but it should be fine since that's absolutely a true thing to say All in all just needs more citations for the claims made Looking great!

Sources


 * These look like strong sources I would just make sure that any new information presented in this article is then linked to one of these sources.