User:Stuartlech/sandbox

From Dr. Hildebrandt: This looks good, Stuart. Please also include the URL to these articles. Especially once you decide which article you will make edits to, you'll want to share that so I can assign the article to you.

1. The stub I chose was the Dogs Act 1871 because I was fascinated seeing legislation about animal rights this long ago. 2. This is a stub according to the bottom of the page. 3. This stub provides very little information on the topic. It is about four sentences in length and the information is miniscule in comparison to another stub. The stub provides what the act is but has no background information. There is also no information about origin. 4. The reference do have hyperlinks that work well. 5. The stub I chose provides good information about what the Dogs Act is about but does not provide any supporting information at all. There is not any information on the origin or even how the act came about.

SA #18

List of Stubs: U.S. Department of the Treasury, Office of Inspector General, Laurence Bennett, Robert Ford (outlaw), Convention Army

SA #19

I did not find a guide of the stub that connects to the topic of the stub I am working with. The stub I chose (U.S. Department of the Treasury, Office of Inspector General) does not provide much context on the topic. The stub provides a standard definition of what the office is and a list of History of Inspectors Generals and their appointment dates for each individual. This stub does not give a great Idea of the overall topic.

SA #20

Stub #1:

Convention Army

Source 1:

https://allthingsliberty.com/tag/convention-army/

Source 2:

. London: Publish'd as the Act directs by William Lane, Leadenhall Street, Jany. 1. Photograph. Retrieved from the Library of Congress, .

The first source I chose is a journal that has well written accounts of the captured British soldiers of the Convention Army. This is important because this helps give everyone good insight of all accounts. The second source I chose was an image that shows an encampment of Charlotte Ville in Virginia. This photo shows the convention army captured at the surrender in Saratoga, engaged in subsistence farming. This is important because it gives us a good picture to visualize the stub I have chosen.

SA #21

Stub #2:Robert Ford (outlaw)

Source 1:

https://www.legendsofamerica.com/robert-ford/

Source 2:

https://historicmissourians.shsmo.org/robert-ford

The first source I chose is a small article I found that briefly provides supporting information on Robert Fords earlier years and his upbringing. The second source is I chose is a page made by historic Missourians which reinforces a lot of the same information in the stub I have chosen. This improves the credibility of the information that the stub provides.

SA #22

Convention Army


 * 1) I believe my sources provide more aspects to the topic at hand. My first source gives multiple accounts from the Convention army which allows multiple accounts to be shown. My second source helps give visualization because it provides a digital image of the encampment of the Convention army.
 * 2) I may add a section that gives some accounts from British soldiers I found in my journal source but that is still to be determined. It is very possible I will not need to add a new area for this article however.
 * 3) The regiment saw two extended deployments to North America, 1750-1763 and 1773-1783. The 47th Regiment was originally formed in Scotland in 1741 but moved to North America in 1750, literally after a roll of the dice turned up the regiment’s number. The regiment served in Nova Scotia and Canada through 1763; it returned to Ireland for ten years before redeploying to North America once again, in 1773, to address the colonial unrest developing on the eve of the American Revolution. The regiment served in New Jersey and New York then moved to Boston in 1774 and on to Canada in 1776, relieving the siege of Quebec.

  SA #23

-I have made my own sandbox about the convention army that has all of my edits.

-The first edit I made was a description of a picture on the right side of the Wikipedia article. Originally the the article stated in the description "A 1789 etching depicting the encampment of the Convention Army at Charlottesville, Virginia". I have changed this to "Print shows a panoramic view of the landscape in Charlottesville, Virginia, with British troops, captured at the surrender in Saratoga, engaged in subsistence farming." I believe this change was necessary because I believe a description in this context needs to provide more specific details. I will also be adding a source in references to better reflect this change.

-I have made no changes to the Convention of Saratoga section.

-I have made a minor vocabulary change to the Cambridge section

The text originally states "The rank and file were quartered in crude barracks that had been constructed during the 1775 siege of Boston, while most of the officers were billeted in houses." I have changed the wording to " The regular members were quartered in crude barracks that had been constructed during the 1775 siege of Boston, while most of the officers were billeted in houses." I believe this improves the conciseness of what is being said in this section.

I Have made multiple refinements to the Virginia section of this Wikipedia article. This sections starts by stating "In November 1778, the Convention Army began marching south 700 miles (1,100 km) to Charlottesville, Virginia, arriving in uncharacteristically snowy weather in January 1779." I have changed this to In November 1778, the Convention Army began marching south 700 miles (1,100 km (about twice the length of New York State)) to Charlottesville, Virginia, arriving in uncharacteristically snowy weather in January 1779." I believe this change will give people a better sense of perspective. Next in this section I have changed "The Virginia troops assigned to guard duty were generally better fed and equipped than any other forces, so that prisoner letters would reflect a strong Continental Army." I have modified this to improve conciseness. This now states "The Virginia troops assigned to guard duty were better fed and equipped than any other forces, so that prisoner letters would reflect a strong Continental Army." The next change I made is a quote used in this section that states "The commanding officer has been informed that an officer of the Convention Army who is residing in a different part of the county makes a practice of going to Negrew quarters in the night and associating with slaves, to the disatisdaction of the inhabitants. This practice is positively forbid in future...". This quote has multiple grammatical errors that I have changed. It now states "The commanding officer has been informed that an officer of the Convention Army who is residing in a different part of the county makes a practice of going to Negro quarters in the night and associating with slaves, to the dissatisfaction of the inhabitants. This practice is positively forbid in future..." Those are all the refinements I made to this section.

The last change I have made is in the references section of the article I have chosen. I have added two sources to reflect the changes I have made above.