User:Studenteditor03/Police body camera/Bonniedog11 Peer Review

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 * studenteditor03


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead reflects the new content added. The introductory sentence sets the scene for the rest of the added information and clearly describes the topic of the rest of the paragraph. It includes information that is not already present in the article, yet is concise.

Content

These additions add a lot of value to the article and address important topics. Some constructive criticism that I have is that I believe quotes are highly discouraged in Wikipedia, for summarizing is preferred, so I would change some of the quotes in these edits. Additionally, I do not know if the quote from the 25 year old is necessarily beneficial to add to the page, not because its not relevant or helpful, but because Wikipedia doesn't usually use random individuals as evidence. Rather, they usually use data from groups of people, like what you used earlier in the paragraph. The content added is up-to-date.

Tone and balance

The content added is neutral and does not appear to be biased toward a particular position. There aren't any viewpoints that are overrepresented or underrepresented. The content added does not attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position.

Sources and references

All the new content is backed up by a reliable secondary source of information and accurately reflects what the cited sources say. They are current and the links work.

Organization

The content added is well-written, with no grammatical errors. It is all well-organized and reflects the points of the topic.