User:Subi6197/Hami melon/Shmoneyboo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

subi6197


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Subi6197/Hami_melonveaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):
 * Hami melon
 * Hami melon

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * I would suggest making your lead longer because currently it is quite short, making the article look less professional (if that makes sense). One way you can do this is by describing the basic physical appearance of the fruit.
 * I would suggest changing the name of the second subtitle to make it more focused. Right now, it just says Hami Melon yet the content below it is very history based so perhaps titling it "History" or "History of the Hami Melon" would be more fitting.
 * The information you added to the article is very relevant and adds some much needed detail to the wiki page. Keep up the good work!
 * All of the information you added appears to be properly cited which is good. Additionally you included an image of your own choosing which I think adds to the article in a good way. I need to do that.
 * Note: I would suggest talking more about the appearance and taste of the fruit at some point in the article.