User:Sugaryshae/Writing in childhood/AKort24 Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Sugaryshae
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Sugaryshae/Writing in childhood
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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content: The content is relevant and concise. The content appears up to date. The only thing I would change about the content is moving some of the sentences around in your first section. The first sentence makes me feel like you are taking a stance. If you talked about more reading, writing, classroom strategies first it might help. Still think it should be kept in the article.

Tone and Balance: The article seems to be very well balanced and seem to take an informative direction- which is good, no bias. Each section is really well done and carries a lot of information.

Sources and references: At a small glance, your sources and references look up to date. I like that they are all used multiple times throughout the article. I see some sources haven't been used yet, I am assuming that is because you are adding more information. One is highlighted in red coloring, so I would check that out, I think it is just missing some information.

Organization: I think your article is organized well and it makes sense to the reader. I don't see any errors within the writing, it looks clear and concise.