User:Sultanmoe/Built environment/Joseita Tesolin Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the draft you have written for your Wikipedia article on built environment is very well done so far. The lead in for your article is relevant and thought-provoking. I do think, however, that you could also include a more specific definition about what ‘built environment’ actually means so that readers can situated themselves within the topic and be set up for an all-encompassing understanding of it.

In terms of the body of your article, I think that the information is well written and well researched, with many scholars being included. I do think that the order and format of the article could be more clearly defined. For instance, you state in the lead-in of your article that there are 5 main strategies, so perhaps you could format the body of your article under the headings of each strategy.

Concerning your media, I noticed that you have not yet include any images or multi-media content in your article. For the final piece, including an image or video would be very helpful and intriguing for the readers.

In terms of sourcing and tone, I think that you have included many relevant, credible, and well researched sources. I do acknowledge that this is your draft so I’m sure there is a lot of souring and referencing do still be done. That being said, I just want to suggest that you ensure your sources are included with hyperlinks for all of the information from scholarly articles, and that you also included links to other Wikipedia pages and blog through hyperlinks. Furthermore, I think it’s important to make sure that you are clear about the fact that the ideas you are writing about are the ideas of scholars and not your own. Again, I realize it is a draft, but there are some points in which it seems like you are expressing your own opinion rather than the ideas of the scholars.

Overall this is a wonderful article! I learned a lot just by reading your draft and I look forward to reading the final product. Good luck!

- Joseita T