User:Sultanmoe/Built environment/Umiuottawa Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Sultanmoe


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sultanmoe/Built environment


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Built environment

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello @Sultanmoe!

Here's my peer review for your article draft:

Lead

 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? The lead reflects the content. It sounds more like a summary of the upcoming information.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes, it gives a clear summary.

Content

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? I found the article not quite relevant to the Built Environments topic. To my understanding, built environments are more connected to engineering and architecture, rather than education. Positive teacher-student relationship is a topic related to the field of education.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes, all the used sources are recent

Tone and Balance

 * Is the content added neutral? The content has a structure of an expository essay, rather than informative article.

Sources and References

 * Are the sources current? The sources are recent
 * Check a few links. Do they work? The YouTube link linked to the article works and is relevant to the topic of student-teacher relationship.

Overall impressions
Overall, the article discusses a very important topic in education; building positive teacher-student relationship. The connection to the original article on Built Environments is not apparent. The article carries a tone of an essay. I would suggest adjusting the tone to more informative, encyclopedic style. Additionally, reviewing the references would be a great idea. There is a citation adding tool available on the top menu of the user page. I would suggest using this option to create citations that match style requirements. One last thing I could suggest is to link your article to other Wikipedia articles or web pages to increase its discoverability.