User:SunRey451/Dark Horse Comics/Shelbo33 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(SunRey451)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SunRey451/Dark_Horse_Comics?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dark Horse Comics

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the Lead section, this section confused me a little bit:

"Dark Horse Comics has become a strong proponent of publishing licensed material that often does not fit into mainstream media. Several titles include: Sin City, Hellboy, Buffy the Vampire Slayer, 300, and Star Wars. "

Are you saying that these titles do not fit into mainstream media, or that the comic book format does not fit into the mainstream form of media these titles possess? I was just confused because I feel like all of these titles are quite mainstream, especially Star Wars.

Peer Review Checklist:

- Everything in article is relevant to the topic! Nothing really distracted me (granted, I am seeing this article near completion so many errors have already been fixed), but I was surprised to see such large branded names and that Dark Horse Comics had something to do with them!

- Overall, the tone of this article is fairly neutral. I did not feel persuaded in any particular direction; it just felt informative and to the point.

- After the edits I know you've made, the viewpoints in this article are pretty evenly represented. And I know you were worried about your speech register not matching that of the existing article, but as I was reading, your contributions did not stick out as if not fitting in!

- I know your collaborators were giving you a hard time with your citations, claiming there were double citations. However, I feel the citations (particularly in the Lead section) all matter and need to be there, regardless of having repetition in the citations. All of the links worked that I clicked on worked, and I especially appreciate that the bigger-name comic series' links actually lead you to the comic book material rather than the films and tv shows they are so often attributed to.

- The citations you added make logical sense to me, and I feel these are reliable sources you used! And I don't think the information is outdated. It is kind of hard to be outdated when this comic publishing company has been releasing comics for as long as they have.

Overall, this article does need some more work in the citation department and could just be edited for grammar mistakes to increase credibility. I would maybe like to see the timeline broken up into smaller chunks as well! I appreciate the chronological subheadings, but it would be easier to absorb the information and gain a stronger understanding of Dark Horse's timeline if the content within these subheadings were broken down and more concise. Of course, a change like that will take more time than we have for this project, but its definitely something you and the other collaborators can think about longterm! Great work!