User:Sunflowerkarli/Running amok/Comfort06 Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
"Running amok" is used to refer to the behavior of someone who, in the grip of strong emotion, obtains a weapon, which is usually a gun, and begins attacking people which usually ends in the murdering of a lot of people. An episode of amok may be triggered by a period of depression or highly aggressive behavior. For about twenty years, this type of behavior has been described as a culture-bound syndrome. There are different theories that each discuss potential reasons for the behavior pertaining to what causes this type of behavior, including where the word "amok" came from. In fact, amok has been compared to mass shootings since both share common traits which include: anger and feelings stemming from prejudice and paranoid thoughts.

Peer review:

In the first sentence, make sure to change the phrase "a lot" to "large quantity of people." This gives it a more concise tone. For the second to last paragraph, remove the word "each." You can say, "there are different theories that discuss potential reasons for the behavior pertaining to the cause of this behavior..." Also, Good job using citations to support the article.