User:Sunfloweryellow007/Telesterion/GalaticPanda Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sunfloweryellow007


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Sunfloweryellow007/Telesterion - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Telesterion - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead- Well done on your lead, I like how you took the ideas in the original article and added more information to them, as well as rewording some parts as well. One suggestion I might make to add to this section is the addition of a map of where in Greece this site is located. Content- As you might notice I accidently made my initial edits directly on the page itself, the main thigs I changed were what I felt made the flow better and reworded and added to a few section. You should be able to see the edits that I made under the history tab, and you should also be able to revert back to your original work if my edits are not on base with what you were thinking.  Tone and Balance- The tone of your additions seems to have no biased in anyway.   Sources and References- Nice job on finding a wide variety of sources on this topic. The only suggestion I have is to add a picture of a map with the location of Telesterion on it so that readers can see where it is located in Greece.   Organization- I think that your organization is perfect, it flows together really well and provides a clear picture of the history of Telesterion.   Images and Media- Other than adding a picture of a map to show the location of Telesterion, you might think about try and find a picture of the Homeric Hymn to Demeter, so readers have a reference for that one your article page rather than linked to another one.   Overall- Overall, your additions to this article are well crafted and add to the flow of the piece, nice job!