User:SunnyMander26/Armenian millet/AnthonyG5480 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SunnyMander26


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:SunnyMander26/sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Armenian millet

Evaluate the drafted changes
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As there isn't much to go off of on the original article any addition made is helpful but I'll review your's as best as possible. Firstly I'm assuming you intend to insert this into the article after the current opening that it already has in which case it feels weird and doesn't exactly flow. I have a similair feeling for the last two sentenes of the your draft and feel like it would be better to combine them into one sentence to rather than two awkard ones next to eachother as they both relate to the power of the Armenian millet. The only other main thing I'd say is to possible use another source to try and help add a bit more to the article (not alot only 1-2 sentences) as it it very sparse already and could use all the help it could get.