User:SunshineANDSmile/ExxonMobil/SunshineANDSmile Peer Review

General info
Forest gump egg
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Forest_gump_egg/ExxonMobil&oldid=1211656088
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * ExxonMobil

Evaluate the drafted changes
First sentence is worded a little funny, maybe instead say, “As a gas company that exploits fossil field, Exon does, it is important for them to look at why they are this and why the government has restriction and sanctions on their industry.”:

Make sure you are using text citations as well!!

Exon is spelt differently throughout your contribution… is it Exon or Exonn?

When you say the price of a barr-el maybe explain what a barrel is and how it is important to this process.

Go into depth about the fact that the government expects the gas demands to only increase yet this company is providing electric cars for society and how the demand for the electric cars compares to the demand for gasoline cars.

If you want you could go more into depth about the gas they extracted and burned fossil fuels because as I read I am intrigued by this and its impact, however, I am also a little confused about what it is trying to say. Are you trying to say they caused more pollution or help decrease the pollution?

The government wants the gas to be 11% by 2035, however, they expect that the demands for gas to only increase… So does the government want to see more electric cars? Is that the change they want to make in order to decrease the demand for gasoline cars?

Also you could do some research and add more to their section climate change denial and taking a deeper dive into that.

At the end of your contribution you mentioned how Exon is a gas company yet they are switching to more electric dependent methods, which is very interesting from a climate change perspective. It could be very valuable to emphasize this throughout your contribution because it shows the devastating impact gas has on our climate if gas companies are willing to switch to these alternative methods.

Overall I really liked your contribution and I think it provided a lot of extra and critical information about Exxon. I would love to know more about how gas emissions impact the planet as Exxon is a gas company and see how their emissions have changed due to their implementation of electric sources. Those types of statistics could help show the progress of this company and how they are improving and how they are not. If you wanted to you could also mention the costs of electric vs gas (especially in the long term). Is it costing the company more to make these switches to electrical? If so, why are they still making the changes? Is it because the government is regulating it or is it because they actually care about their impact on the climate? Companies like Exxon definitely face the fear of going out of business due to these sustainability changes and implementations, did Exxon feel like that? Do you think they might switch to being completely/ more electric in the future? Overall I thought your contribution was very impressive and it led me to want to know more and piqued my curiosity and I very much enjoyed reading it. If you have any questions about any of my recommendations please feel free to reach out at any time!