User:Superdeadpatroclus/Ephor/Francinewithaperm Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Superdeadpatroclus


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Superdeadpatroclus/Ephor?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ephor

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer Review Comments

1. The Lead Section

A little short maybe look for more details that could beef up the Lead. Another suggestion for that would be to include a section where you talk briefly about what's going to be in the article just a quick overview so the reader knows what to expect. you did a great job with your opening sentence immediately defining who these men were and what they did as well as their relationship to the King.

2. Clarity of Article Structure

I thought the structure of the article was good and the order you have your sections is great and it reads cohesively. I will say this and I may or may not be wrong but should Ephors be capitalized? It's a title right like King? I could be wrong but I figured I would throw it in here. I would go through and make sure you are capitalizing names and titles there are a few instances where a king is referred to and when it's used as a title it should be capitalized. Another thing is to make sure that your titles are capitalized both words it will look more balanced if bothe words in the section title are capitalized.

3. Coverage Balance

I think your sections look great they are all relatively the same size and I think given the topic you did a great job of organizing and presenting the information.

4. Content Neutrality

The neutrality is perfect when I was reading the article I did not get a sense you thought any one way about this group of people. I mean it's a little hard to care that much about it but still, the article does a good job of remaining neutral and just relaying the facts that we know about Ephors.

5. Sources

You have a lot of references have you checked all of them? are they reliable? I checked a few and they looked good I obviously did not click on all of them but I think it would be a good thing to do for your to make sure they all work and take you to the right places. I did not see a notes section that could be helpful to include as well as a bibliography section.

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