User:Superunsubscriber/Camming/Casademasa Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall this is a really interesting topic and you do a great job of introducing it and providing a general overview of the issues and information surrounding camming. Your lead section is a good introduction to the topic, is concise, and easy to follow. In your background section, you might consider adding more research and information about the rise of camming. What technological advancements besides live streaming led to its popularity? What are some of the host sites you mention and how do they operate? Are there privacy concerns? How do these websites ensure the safety and security of cam models' information or content? How is this culturally viewed in media? (consider the rise in references to Onlyfans in media, or the problems associated with this). You could also consider including some ethnographic interviews from cam models themselves to see how they view the work. The debate you touch on about how different subsets of feminist thought either condone or condemn cam work is interesting and I would love to see you add more detail there. This is a great start to the overall direction of your article and I think adding some more depth and sources would help make it stronger. In future drafts, you will also want to include links to other articles within yours and add citations.