User:Sustainable101/Sustainable public bus transport in Barcelona/Heloise33 Peer Review

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User: Sustainable101
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 * User:Sustainable101/Sustainable public bus transport in Barcelona
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * For the lead, it might be helpful to have a first sentence that is strong and is clearly introducing the topic of public bus transport in Barcelona
 * In the lead a brief description of what topics will be discussed during the article

Timeline and transition from diesel to electric:


 * First sentence under the timeline section is concise and guides the paragraph in the right direction
 * May be helpful to go more in depth about the lines running parallel to tram lines being eliminated
 * Further explain ISO 14001- I am sure it is very important in the progress of making public bus transport more sustainable
 * "Other projects and initiatives were focused on innovation and the adoption of cleaner technologies, for example hybrid and electric buses, and natural gas buses."- This should be discussed with more detail
 * European ZeEUS project, could also be helpful to explain this further
 * Could be interesting to add the future goals that align with creating sustainable public bus transport
 * Diesel should be discussed more and its consequences to the environment as it is stated in the title
 * Overall there is neutral content being discussed, no bias just facts, some viewpoints appear to be underrepresented, and the content does not attempt to persuade the reader in one direction

Shaping public perception of transportation:


 * Capturing first sentence that draws the audience in
 * Talks about the park-and-ride facilities initiative but not exactly what it is
 * Mentions the commitment to transitioning to zero-emission bus lines, but not how it will be getting started/done
 * What is the plan to expand the bike lanes by 40%
 * Overall the ideas are good but it is important to go further in detail in these matters instead of summarizing the idea that Barcelona is moving to become more sustainable

Sources and references:


 * Reliable sources
 * Good use of information pulled from these sources

Organization:


 * Two grammar errors I saw:
 * 3rd to last paragraph- "to be active in this sustainable livable urban environment.", I think it may be "to be active in this sustainable, livable, and urban environment" using commas
 * Last paragraph- "address not only  the immediate challenges" extra space is added
 * Structure is easy to read and divided in a good way

New articles:


 * Article is supported by 2-3 secondary reliable sources independent of the subject
 * Contains the necessary section headings

Overall impressions:


 * With these suggestions the article will become more informative on the important topics mentioned, but not fully explained as to what they are and what they are doing
 * Informative and to the point title
 * No run-on sentences
 * Concise but more information on certain topics would help and still remain concise