User:Sustainabledevelopmentstudent/Watts Rising/Santana1998 Peer Review

General info
( Heloise33, Ericcartman20, Treeluver123)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Sustainabledevelopmentstudent/Watts Rising
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User:Sustainabledevelopmentstudent/Watts Rising

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * hyperlink to article about Watts
 * Include population of Watts

The Mission and Purpose of Watts Rising:


 * in the introduction don’t say “this essay will explore” and avoid any language that would make the article more like an essay
 * Watt’s is “a neighborhood that” paragraph could probably be mentioned in the lead (all information about what Watt's is should probably be in the lead and the rest of the article should be specific to exactly what the Watt's Rising project is doing)
 * Mission paragraph is strong, very direct language, to the point of what Watt’s Rising actually does. Maybe could separate the key objectives into a list instead of paragraph format to make it easier and quicker to read
 * Maybe just explicitly state the purpose of watts rising somewhere in beginning

Methods:


 * super strong first paragraph, add a citation as you are giving a lot of very specific information
 * Maybe explicitly state the 3 working groups in the first sentence of the working group paragraph and then go into detail about them
 * Really strong evidence with the numbers at the end, just have a citation after each number probably

Organizations Involved:


 * Strong first paragraph, I would maybe include the specific phases of the project that come after the tree maintenance phase unless that is it.