User:Sustainabledevelopmentstudent/Watts Rising/Willjco02 Peer Review

General info
(Sustainabledevelopmentstudent, Heloise33, Ericcartman20, Treeluver123)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Sustainabledevelopmentstudent/Watts Rising
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Strong opening sentence
 * Offer some detail about the different sections of the article
 * Maybe a bit about key figures, areas of interest, etc

Content


 * In the opening paragraphs, you probably want to cite some sources for their mission and purpose
 * A little bit repetitive with some of the mission/purpose content. You could shorten this section and talk more about specific efforts undertaken by Watts
 * Good info in the progress report section.

Tone

Images and Media
 * Some GPT-sounding statements, like repeating "a beacon of hope" twice
 * Some editorial-esque writing: "and embodies the strength and adaptability of a neighborhood that will continue to show that they are more than the challenges they face"
 * Could cut this, or state it more objectively


 * Your images should have captions
 * The Tree People image is low quality