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Article Evaluation
The article was relevant to the topic. I was a little distracted by the length; the article was very short. Due to this, the information was very brief and did not explain how or why the Mayan's astronomical knowledge was better than that of early Europeans. The article has a potential to be biased toward the Mayan's ability to understand astronomy as it makes claims, but does not explain why. If the explanation was there then perhaps it wouldn't seem biased. Also, on the second note link, it shows that Ptolemy was very close to the same measurements as the Mayans. The way the article presents it makes it sound like the Mayan measurements were significantly better The article is short and not many viewpoints are shared, therefore, I would consider the viewpoints to be underrepresented. The links work. From what I can tell, the source does support the claims in the article. Depending on the qualifications to be "out of date", the information was taken from an older source written in 1999. This source is extensive and I believe more information could be taken from this, however, additional sources will be necessary. A lot of the talk was about merging this article with Mayan Civilization, but many disagreed and believed Mayan Astronomy was well worth having its own article, but no one has been able to take the time to improve upon it.
 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
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 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
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Week 7 Assigned Article: Inca Society
In the article, Inca Society, I would like to include some examples of marriages and Improve upon the information that is already in the section as there are quite a few places with a "citation needed". I would also like to include more about the role that women played in Inca society.

Notes for Improvement:
I need to look more into the parts that have [citation needed] and find more information to verify the information. If I can find information, I'd like to include the following that is missing from the article:

-The role marriage took in Inca Society

-What the actual wedding/marriage celebration "looked" like

-How marriage differed for different social rankings

-More about diplomatic marriages

-Besides divorce, what was custom to do with women who couldn't have children?

-What was married life like when there were children?

Also, add to sources:

Outline:

 * Approval of Marriages
 * From the book "The Incas" use info from page 304


 * Social Status and Marriage (add to and improve 3rd paragraph of existing)
 * Diplomatic marriages incorporated here.
 * Found sources to back up some information for what women were expected to do after marriage as well as when they became pregnant.
 * Add to last paragraph of existing
 * Edit/add citation to first sentence of last paragraph ("The Incas" page 304)
 * Use "Andean Women in the Inca Empire” page 42
 * Use "The Incas" page 299-300
 * Add information/section about marriage ceremony
 * Use information from "The Incas" page

Marriage
Incan women were typically married at the age of sixteen, while men married at the age of 20. Men of lower rank could only have one wife; people of ranks higher than the kurca were allowed more.

Trial marriages were typical within Inca culture. In this type of marriage, the man and woman would agree to try out being married to one another for a few years. At the end of this time, the woman could go home to her parents if she wished, and her husband could also send her home if he did not think it would work out. However, once the marriage was made final, they could only divorce if the woman was childless.

Women would almost always marry men in the same social class as themselves. However, while it was very rare for them to marry a man with a higher social ranking, it was still possible for some young women. The only way for a young woman to alter her social ranking would be if a man of higher ranking took notice of her.

In the Inca society, a wedding was not a joyous celebration. Instead, it was looked at more as a business-like agreement. Therefore, for the Inca, marriage was an economic agreement between two families. Once a woman was married, she was expected to collect food and cook, watch over the animals and the children. A woman’s household obligations would not change after she became pregnant. When she did find out she was pregnant she prayed and made offerings to an Inca god, Kanopa.

My Additions
Women and men had paralleled roles, but were separate in Inca society. They were equally valued for the part they played in their society despite their differing roles. Marriage was no different.

To make the marriage final, the provincial governor had to approve the union.

Using marriage as an alliance strategy was common among the Inca. Even before the Spaniards' arrival, the Inca used marriage as a way to claim themselves to power. After the Spaniards arrival the Inca allowed marriages between the Inca and Spaniards in order to gain power during a time of civil war.

In the Inca society, a wedding was a simple event.

If a man had more than one wife, one served as the principal wife while the other(s) were considered secondary. Having more wives showed that the man had more labor showing that the household was wealthy. The death of the principal wife was sometimes met with suspicion that the husband played a role in her death. The man had to find a new principal wife before he was able to recover from the previous wife's death.

Parents on either side had to come to an agreement before the marriage took place and the couple could not be directly related to one another.

... and to supply cloth to the government. Women of higher ranking also weaved, like those of lower ranks, but their work was used in special clothing for the higher ranks.

A man's role sometimes resembled those of a woman, but acted in conjunction with one another.

Sustainablility4life (talk) 16:51, 19 October 2017 (UTC)

Combined Original Article and Edits/Additions
Women and men had paralleled roles, but were separate in Inca society. They were equally valued for the part they played in their society despite their differing roles. Marriage was no different.

Incan women were typically married at the age of sixteen, while men married at the age of 20. Men of lower rank could only have one wife; people of ranks higher than the kurca were allowed more. If a man had more than one wife, one served as the principal wife while the other(s) were considered secondary. Having more wives showed that the man had more labor showing that the household was wealthy. The death of the principal wife was sometimes met with suspicion that the husband played a role in her death. The man had to find a new principal wife before he was able to recover from the previous wife's death.

Trial marriages were typical within Inca culture. In this type of marriage, the man and woman would agree to try out being married to one another for a few years. At the end of this time, the woman could go home to her parents if she wished, and her husband could also send her home if he did not think it would work out. However, once the marriage was made final, they could only divorce if the woman was childless. To make the marriage final, the provincial governor had to approve the union.

Women would almost always marry men in the same social class as themselves. However, while it was very rare for them to marry a man with a higher social ranking, it was still possible for some young women. The only way for a young woman to alter her social ranking would be if a man of higher ranking took notice of her.

Using marriage as an alliance strategy was common among the Inca. Even before the Spaniards' arrival, the Inca used marriage as a way to claim themselves to power. After the Spaniards arrival the Inca allowed marriages between the Inca and Spaniards in order to gain power during a time of civil war.

In the Inca society, a wedding was a simple event. Instead, it was looked at more as a business-like agreement. Therefore, for the Inca, marriage was an economic agreement between two families. Parents on either side had to come to an agreement before the marriage took place and the couple could not be directly related to one another. Once a woman was married, she was expected to collect food and cook, watch over the animals and the children, and to supply cloth to the government. Women of higher ranking also weaved, like those of lower ranks, but their work was used in special clothing for the higher ranks. A man's role sometimes resembled those of a woman, but acted in conjunction with one another. A woman’s household obligations would not change after she became pregnant. When she did find out she was pregnant she prayed and made offerings to an Inca god, Kanopa.

Peer edits by K8shep (talk) 19:46, 23 October 2017 (UTC)
I'm editing this since it didn't get peer edits. Yours wasn't the only one that didn't. You've chosen a really interesting topic, and I'm impressed with the work you've done. Your sandbox is really well organized so it makes the peer reading I have to do so much easier! Thank you! Your additions are pretty important as they add not just transitional information to make the article section flow better, but they also add substance which is important for the narrative. I like the addition of the info about gender roles and when a wife dies, what the man has to do. A couple things--I changes principal wife to principal wife (which should mean main). Have you thought about finding and adding appropriate citations where the original says "citation needed"? That could add some useful information. Think about editing some of the awkward wording in the original article. This will help make your edits flow even better. You might also think about reorganizing the order of some of the information. For example, the last paragraph looks like the information could be dispersed throughout the article itself, or moved around a bit. It would help the section to make more sense. Good work all around!

Response to Peer Edits
Thanks for the suggestions! In response to your reviews: 1. I changed principal to principal. 2. I found citations within my sources for most of the "citation needed" parts of the original. I just added on to or changed the wording to the original to make sure the citation matched with the source's information. The one that is left, I have not found an appropriate citation, yet. I am still looking for a good citation, though. 3. I also reorganized the article information to make it flow better. I will continue to play around with organizing the information as well as work on the wording within the article. Sustainablility4life (talk) 16:13, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

New Edits to Article
Women and men had paralleled roles, but were separate in Inca society. They were equally valued for the part they played in their society despite their differing roles. Marriage was no different.

Once a woman was married, she was expected to collect food and cook, watch over the animals and the children, and to supply cloth to the government. Women of higher ranking also weaved, like those of lower ranks, but their work was used in special clothing for the higher ranks. A man's role sometimes resembled those of a woman, but acted in conjunction with one another. A woman’s household obligations would not change after she became pregnant. When she did find out she was pregnant she prayed and made offerings to an Inca god, Kanopa.

Incan women were typically married at the age of sixteen, while men married at the age of twenty. Men of lower rank could only have one wife; people of ranks higher than the kurca were allowed more. If a man had more than one wife, one served as the principal wife while the other(s) were considered secondary. Having more wives showed that the man had more labor showing that the household was wealthy. The death of the principal wife was sometimes met with suspicion that the husband played a role in her death. The man had to find a new principal wife before he was able to recover from the previous wife's death. To prevent such suspicion and to increase the likelihood of a successful marriage, there were situations in which the couple could test how well the marriage would work out.

Trial marriages were typical within Inca culture. In this type of marriage, the man and woman would agree to try out being married to one another for a few years. At the end of this time, the woman could go home to her parents if she wished, and her husband could also send her home if he did not think it would work out. However, once the marriage was made final, they could only divorce if the woman was childless. To make the marriage final, the provincial governor had to approve the union.

In the Inca society, a wedding was a simple event. Instead, it was looked at more as a business-like agreement. Therefore, for the Inca, marriage was an economic agreement between two families. Parents on either side had to come to an agreement before the marriage took place and the couple could not be directly related to one another. Social classes played a role in the marriage agreement as well. Women would almost always marry men in the same social class as themselves. However, while it was very rare for them to marry a man with a higher social ranking, it was still possible for some young women. The only way for a young woman to alter her social ranking would be if a man of higher ranking took notice of her. Using marriage as an alliance strategy was also common among the Inca. Even before the Spaniards' arrival, the Inca used marriage as a way to claim themselves to power. After the Spaniards arrival the Inca allowed marriages between the Inca and Spaniards in order to gain power during a time of civil war.

Sustainablility4life (talk) 16:13, 27 October 2017 (UTC)