User:Swaggyswaps/Sistrum/BlueCat976 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Swaggyswaps


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Swaggyswaps/Sistrum - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sistrum - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Citations needed in the first paragraph – all of those sentences should probably be citated. Good job adding several, but honestly, cite everything

First sentence in the article body needs a citation

Citation needed for everything after the stuff you added in Article Body

Very good added information – also, thank you for bolding the new stuff, its very helpful 😊

In the intro paragraph, probably add a reference to the Minoan one, even though it's not technically what we are learning about.

Overall, the things you are adding are really good. It seems like from the start the main thing that was needed was a section for Egyptian sistrum and lots of citations, which you are doing a good job on. Make sure that anything that is not an original thought is cited - which, in theory, is everything since all the information is existing out there somewhere