User:Swaggyswaps/Sistrum/Itsnotironic Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Swaggyswaps


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Swaggyswaps/Sistrum - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sistrum - Wikipedia

Lead:
Looks good to me. Clear and concise, but still gets across the most important information. Maybe rephrase the sentence about the west African instrument? It's a little confusing.

Content:
I noticed that you appear to have cut the main body entries for both the Minoan Sistrum as well as the modern African instrument. Is this intentional, or will these be added in as-is later? I would recommend the latter, as without them the article feels a little incomplete.

Tone and Balance:
Both properly neutral. Well done!

Sources and References:
I notice that one of your sources was published in 1920. Would it be possible to locate a more up-to-date record of the same information? Otherwise, looks good.

Organization:
If you are including the later segments of the original article, you might consider making the West African Sistrum a separate section, as opposed to being lumped under 'the sistrum today.'

Images and Media:
I reckon you could get away with migrating the original article's media one-to-one and have it look pretty good.

Overall Impressions:
It's a good start! Just keep giving the rest of the original the same treatment as you have the stuff you've already worked on, and you'll be fine.