User:Swbamboo/Chen Tianbao/YAM97 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Swbamboo


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Swbamboo/Chen_Tianbao?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chen Tianbao

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

The lead provides a good and concise introduction into what the article is about and why it's important, however it seems to emphasize his role as a pirate and the rest of the article doesn't seem to mention that in further detail.

Content:

The content is relevant to the topic, but again, I would add more about his role as a pirate - there is only information on his time with the Tay Son army.

Tone and Balance:

I think for the most part the article sounds neutral, however there are two places where I think the wording could maybe be changed or quantified to be more neutral. The first is "He was good at sailing..." Here, it might be helpful to quantify this through any kind of achievements, recognitions, or other examples of his skill. The other is "After the Tay Son army was utterly beaten..." Here, I think the adverb is unnecessary.

Sources and References:

Sources look good! If possible, I think it may helpful to get at least 1 or 2 more, just to get a wider breadth of information. There are also a few links to other Wikipedia articles that don't exist, which I would remove.

Organization:

It might be helpful to split some of the text into different sections - for example by different time periods/stages in his life or by the different jobs he had.

Overall:

I think your article is looking pretty good! I would just focus on balancing out the content a little more and adding a few sources.