User:SweetandSaltyGrrl/Koovagam/Jadeevelynn Peer Review

General info
SweetandSaltyGrrl
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:SweetandSaltyGrrl/Koovagam
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Something I think that you did well was your outline of topics in your article. The ordering, in my opinion, makes sense (starting with an overview, then history, and so on). Your article seems to do a great job at avoiding bias, and it does a great job of presenting the information in a neutral tone. You seem to have a large range of sources, and they all appear to be reliable. In the History/Mythology section, be sure to include your in-text citations where applicable.


 * In the first section, I think that you should also add a quick sentence saying where in India Koovagam is located. In the leading section (in the first paragraph), try adding the purpose of the festival. This will help give readers a better idea of what they’re about to read.


 * I think the greatest thing you could add to this article would be the public perception of the festival by the rest of India. Is it accepted/supported, or rejected and viewed as disgraceful? Adding a part to the article that discusses this will give further insight to readers about the perception of transgender individuals in India.


 * Your article mentions the high rates of HIV within the transgender community in India. This could potentially relate to my group’s article, which is on transmasculine feminism. We can definitely look further into this topic to see how much it relates!

Overall, I think that you all are on track to having a very solid article about the Koovagam Festival!