User:Swiftluvr222/Feminism in Argentina/Tuatarasallthewaydown Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Swiftluvr222


 * Link to draft you're reviewing Feminism in Argentina Sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Feminism in Argentina
 * Feminism in Argentina

Lead:
Jackie does not have a lead in her article draft. She believes she will keep the one what is already on the page, but plans to add the new information she is gathering into the lead in order to keep the lead short and to the point.

Content:
The information Jackie added is imperative to the article. She found all of her information from a 2019 article, which is very up to date in comparative to most information. The article already is quite through on everything but what Jackie is currently writing about, so it is a good thing that she is adding it. What is written does a great job addressing the lack of information on the working women in Argentina in the early 1900's

Tone and Balance:
The article is a little biased only due to the phrasing of certain sentences. There are parts that feel more like an essay about feminism, rather than a presentation of information, so that is something I highly recommend fixing. It does heavily focus on women, but only because that is the focus of the article, so it is hard not too. Overall the tone means well but there are some things that need to be tweaked.

Sources and References
Jackie currently only has one source listed for her material, but is planning on adding more. It is a very current source, written in 2019, so it is almost as up to date as it can be. I recommend looking at the sources the article itself cites in order to find more information about specifics. Overall her article explains the information well, but there are some points that seem slightly biased so I would go back and cite those specifically instead of just at the end of the paragraph.

Organization
Jackie's Draft is organized very similarly to the main article itself. Therefore it will be very easy to migrate her rough draft into the main article. There are no spelling errors or grammatical errors that I can see, but I am not the best person to really find that out. It is broken down nicely into clear sections so overall an amazing job.

Images and Media
Jackie currently has no images.

Overall:
Jackie's information will be a great addition to the Feminism in Argentina Article, adding one of most uncovered part of feminism in a more blunt way. Other than bias issues a pretty good rough draft, I would just recommend continuing to add more information.