User:Swimcoach2!/Red Mountain Park/Tallahassee2003 Peer Review

General info
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 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
Article looks great so far! Don't forget to add your citations and links. Most of the suggestions I have would be to proofread and make small changes. I think there's room to make your paragraph a bit more professional/impersonal.