User:Swimcoach2!/Red Mountain Park/Wareagle1856 Peer Review

Be careful with the use of dashes maybe implement commas or a compound sentence instead.

Article follows a clear structure with good use of headings to separate information.

Try to use a more neutral tone of voice and avoid used phrasing such as "it is unmatched."

The content under the activites heading is a little jumbled. Try to group subjects together and avoid short choppy sentences. The short choppy sentences lead to confusion and disrupt the flow.

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