User:Sxndrx2828/Psychology/TheOneCheese Peer Review

General info
Sxndrx2828
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Sxndrx2828/Psychology
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead isn't bad, but it should be the first section of your article, so I'd switch your "History" section and your "Lead" section.

Tone and Balance:

Overall, your tone is good, but a few times in the article your tone isn't very neutral. For example, the beginning of the "Sigmund Freud" section claims he's one of the most cited psychologists ever. While that may be true you should just state that he was a psychologist, maybe a bit about what he accomplished in the field of psychology and then move on.

Organization:

The Organization is pretty good other than "Lead" section problem that I mentioned earlier. However, the actual content in the article is a bit odd. You have an entire section dedicated to only Sigmund Freud, but no other psychologists or other psychological researchers. I would also rename the "Article Body" Section to something more specific.

Images and Media:

I would add at least one image for each of your different sections, but the one image you have right now looks good.

Overall Impressions:

I took a look at the original "Psychology" article and there is way too much, but there's also a lot of good information there. It might be good if you guys took some of the sections from there, cut out what you don't need, edit it a bit, and then it'd be good to go. Right now your current draft of the article is on the slimmer side and could be organized a bit better. Maybe do something like a "Notable Psychologists" section and put Sigmund Freud in there along with at least a few other psychologists just to buff it out a bit more? Overall, it's not too bad though.

~ Jacob