User:SydneyEGrace/Astrobrachion adhaerens/Jcwhrda Peer Review

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 * Astrobrachion adhaerens

TL;DR
The article is well-written, and uses well-substantiated research. Thus, the majority of my suggestions for improvement have to do with organization rather than information. I hope you find my review helpful and evidence of my appreciation of your work rather than as negative criticism, because I sincerely found your article enjoyable and educational to read, and it is well done, especially considering how limited the information you have to work with seems.

Lead
The lead is well constructed, and concise.

Content/Sources and References
The information presented seems current, since the vast majority of the information cited is from this is from this century, and of that mostly from the last four years. All information is pertinent, with the exception of the mention of A. constrictum 's color banding.

Tone and Balance
The article presents a neutral attitude that addresses the gaps in knowledge about the species without being speculative.

Organization
The writing style is simple and easy to understand. Sentences are short and effective. Some suggestions to do with grammar and style.

Overall

 * The italicization of species name is not standardized throughout the article, which should be corrected, though everything seems properly italicized in the sandbox.
 * Uses of the word "Ophiurid" should be replaced with "Ophioroid" or vice-versa for the purposes of standardization.

Lead

 * The the use of "endemic" here is incorrect according to the my understanding of the definition of the word, so it should be rephrased to "native to".
 * I would suggest the first mention of Astrobranchion constrictum should be shortened to A. constrictum, since shared genus is clearly implied, and it is the convention to do so in most scientific writing.
 * Perhaps consider replacing the words "the sister species" from the second paragraph, since it feels repetitive to mention again the fact that it has only one sister species.
 * Potentially, the sentence could be made less stiff by saying "However, information about its sister species A. constrictum and the family..." to reduce the repetition, especially since both "closely related" and "sister species" are mentioned in the next section

Anatomy and Morphology

 * "Genera of Euryalida" should be replaced with "Genera in Euryalida"
 * "hence" is grammatically incorrect, and should be removed from the third paragraph.
 * The color banding of A. constrictum is irrelevant to this article and should be deleted. As such, the following sentence should also be modified to reflect that change.
 * If that change is made, the information about sister species could be included by modifying the next paragraph to say "...are likely shared with its closely related sister species..."
 * Additionally, the A in Asteroschematidid in the last sentence isn't italicized, and should also probably say Asteroschematidae instead

Distribution and Habitat

 * This is more semantic, but in the Distribution and Habitat section, consider replacing "However the relative co-occurrence ranges between 54% and 4%, suggesting that soft corals are not a necessary basket star habitat." with:
 * "However, low relative co-occurrence ranges suggest that soft corals are not a necessary basket star habitat" or
 * "However, low relative co-occurrence ranges (4% - 54%) suggest that soft corals are not a necessary basket star habitat."
 * If not that, maybe make the minor change of rewriting "54% - 4%" as "4% - 54%" to better emphasize the lowness of the co-occurrence.
 * I make this suggestion mainly because I think it would increase readability for laymen.

Behavior

 * For the sake of the article, Astrobrachion could be specifed to A. adhaerens.
 * "Due to nocturnal activities" should be changed to "due to its nocturnal activities" or "due to their nocturnal activities" depending on the prior change is made

Taxonomy

 * "the ophiuroids" should be replaced with "ophiuroids"
 * Consider replacing "divided into" with "classified as"
 * Consider replacing "euryalids and non-euryalids" with "euryalids or non-euryalids"
 * The last sentence mentions "the class Ophiurids", but since you're mentioning the class it should be "the class Ophiuroidea".
 * The last paragraph should be cited, even if it is a repeated source.

Thanks for reading all this, and happy editing!

- JC

Thanks!! This was extremely helpful! -Rea and Sydney