User:Sydneyglouse/Retinoblastoma/Christopher.horacek Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sydney Glouse


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sydneyglouse/Retinoblastoma


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Retinoblastoma

Stages of Retinoblastoma
This is a great addition to the existing page! Suprised this does not have an article itself. The table is a great way to convey the information. The information within the "text body" seems a little long - consider pruning less-relevent information, if applicable.

Signs and Symptoms
Some of this information could be integrated into other pre-existing subheadings. Specifically, the first several sentences of this section might be more relevant underneath the "Epidemiology" heading.

Conclusion
The information in this section could be presented more concisely and additional relevant information from within the article could be added to more completely summarize the topic. The information regarding support systems and infant screenings may be better placed in another section.

Overall Comments
You did an excellent job finding new, yet still relevant, information on a heavily discussed topic. Since this is a fairly extensive page to begin with, be sure to watch out for redundant information as you integrate your new information into the existing article.