User:Sydneyglouse/Retinoblastoma/Sydmarks Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sydney Glouse


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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Very informational writing, despite me not understanding most of it. Organization is good, only some minor formatting errors. Biggest thing is just explain more vocabulary or link to other pages.

Edits are by sections:

Stages of Retinoblastoma


 * I believe the citation goes after the period
 * add links to other wikipedia pages for words like globe/ globe salvage, even chemotherapy, enucleation, or any of the "systems" discussed (sorry if these are all really common terms but I don't know what many of them are)
 * foveola
 * seeding
 * vitreous
 * malignancy
 * ophthalmologist
 * "in order to classify the globe salvage ... very unfavorable" doesn't seem to make sense but it might just be over my head
 * "diameter had to be around four... higher favorability" four what? this may be obvious in the world of eyes but still should be specified
 * specify- ten what?

Signs and Symptoms


 * good information, no apparent grammatical errors
 * could be broken up into smaller sections
 * add links to other pages

Conclusion


 * no need to indent
 * while a good conclusion, seems unnecessary for a wikipedia article? could add information to other sections

References


 * good sources
 * ensure correctly cited, source number 4 is giving a red error message about date values