User:Sydneyhill24/Rebecca Cox Jackson/Wapisiw Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sydneyhill24


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sydneyhill24/Rebecca_Cox_Jackson?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rebecca Cox Jackson
 * Rebecca Cox Jackson

Lead
No change from the original lead paragraph. I think it might be beneficial to name her biography because I couldn't find it in the rest of the article.

Content
All content added is clearly relevant to Rebecca Cox Jackson's life. I do find the organization of the article hard to follow. The very first paragraph of the biography section is quite long, so it is easy to get lost in all the information.

At the end of the first paragraph it mentions that celibacy was required of her as a Shaker (?), but we don't actually find that she was a Shaker until the third paragraph, so I was a bit confused by the information in the parenthesis because that was the first time it was mentioned.

Ultimately, I think you added a lot of relevant information about her and her life that was missing from the original wiki article, and builds upon what other users have written but the organization, specifically when certain aspects of her life are mentioned, could be shifted around to make it flow more easily for a reader.

I did notice one typo in the middle of the first paragraph, for citation 5. "Jouney" is written instead of journey!

I would also be interested in having more content about her autobiography, if there is any information on that because it's mentioned that she is known for her autobiography in the lead paragraph, an other than the last sentence, there isn't much information on it in the main bodies of text.

Sources look good to me! I looked through them.