User:Sydneyoscott/William Dorsey Swann/Hrgmk4 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sydneyoscott


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sydneyoscott/William Dorsey Swann


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * William Dorsey Swann

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the proposed changes to this wiki page will make the wiki page a lot better and more knowledgeable. I especially liked the changes to the Lead because when I initially read the Lead section I did not think it was worded well as well as I thought it could include more information. I also liked your changes to the article's body. I think that the initial article brings up things but it does not expand and I think that your proposed changes will expand on the many things that the article brings up.