User:SymoneSine/sandbox

Potential Changes
 New employee characteristics 

2nd and 3rd paragraphs reuse "proactive" and "information seeking" in a way that seems redundant

3rd and 4th repetition of framing in a positive light seems redundant

Correct for gender neutrality

Sentence structure: period after (2002)?

 New employee behaviors 

Sentence explaining Miller and Jablin's typology flows uncomfortably and seems overdone, considering explanations of them are at the end of the article.

 Organization socialization efforts 

Clarify the info following Van Maanen are the six major tactical dimensions.

Make "Collective versus Individual" conform to formatting. Eliminate "and so forth" and "etc"? Very ambiguous.

Use of "discrete" under sequential vs random seems too formal. Easily confused with "discreet."

Gender neutrality in investiture vs divestiture

Fixed vs variable socialization missing word between "take" and "complete"? Flow with "processes gives"? Missing word between "associated" and "upwardly"?

 Employee adjustment 

Under self-efficacy are "logical sense" and "unsurprisingly" necessary?

Gender neutrality under social acceptance.

 Outcomes 

Comma after "since" in last sentence

 Socialization in online organizations 

"toorganizational" Use of "we"

Week 5
McKenna’s Sandbox

Individuals who experience significant levels of social anxiety often struggle when communicating with others, and may have impaired abilities to demonstrate social cues and behaviors appropriately.

Article Evaluation
Emotional Labor

- Possible citation on the third sentence of the first introductory paragraph?

- Potentially change gendered terms (him/her) under Determinants -> Dispositional Traits to neutral language such as "one" or "them."

- Under Versus Cognitive Labor possibly link "cognitive skill" at beginning of sentence to "cognitive skill" wikipedia page.

- Citation? "The former includes the application of factual knowledge to the intellectual analysis for problems and rational decision making. The latter includes analysis and decision making in terms of the expression of emotion, whether actually felt or not, as well as its opposite: the suppression of emotions that are felt but not expressed."

- Citation? What scholars? Examples of this argument? "Many scholars argue that the amount of emotional work required between all levels of government is on the local level."

- Was updated Sept. 20th.