User:TJScalzo/Claudette Colvin/Nancylii Peer Review


 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * I think the overall tone is neutral, but I feel like the narrative style has room for improvement. For example, the "bus incident" section distracted me a little bit because some lines are not formal enough. (e.g., "She said that she aspired to be president one day" could be better framed as "As a teenager, Colvin aspired to be a president"... this quote also needs a citation?)
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * The "bus incident" part appeared to be the longest section of the article, which makes sense because that's the most significant event of her activist life. But it would be more comprehensive if the article could add other events to support her identity as an activist.
 * Check the citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The second paragraph in the lead needs some citations.

General info

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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)