User:TJWinston12/Ape Action Africa/Coulisz Peer Review

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https://www.thejanegoodallinstitute.com/about-great-ape-trafficking

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Did not author the lead.

Content

Bushmeat section: I would scrap the definition and just link to the bushmeat page on Wikipedia for this. When talking about how it is a threat, I would just state why their meat is valuable, why this is a problem (which you did with the reproduction sentence), and then include something on what Ape Action Africa is doing about it.

Scientific Research section: See if you can add some numbers to back up your statement. This will help give context as to how much of a threat research really is. Also once again, include what Ape Action Africa is doing able it.

Trafficking and Capturing section: This is a really good paragraph. I would once again try and find some statistics to contextualize your paragraph. Also add citations into the beginning of the paragraph. Finally get rid of the information on the endangered species act. The ESA is only a national act while CITES and the IUCN Red List are both international efforts/organizations.

Organization

I like the organization a lot, really good job with that! Your formatting of your paragraphs are lacking some depth though and I think it would help you a lot if you could add information about Ape Action Africa.

I would capitalize the first word of the first sentence in each section. I also would separate the topic header by putting the paragraph on the next line.

Capitalize Primates in “Threats to primates”

Good Job!!! Whoop whoop!

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