User:TL Scarred/Five Families/Amandamamacoyne Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TL Scarred


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Five Families TL Scarred


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Five Families

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, I'm Amanda. I think the information you are contributing to the Five Families article is really good so far. It is all clear and concise with reliable sources to back it up. The entire fall of the mafia section will be a great addition to the article, but I suggest adding more of your citations into that paragraph as well as possibly adding quotes. The same goes to the minor edits you are making. I also suggest making changes to the opening of the article, adding a summary of what exactly the purpose of the mafia is and what they do. Not only did these families commit acts of organized crime, but they gained and fought amongst each other for the control of drug distribution and the leadership of New York through corrupting police and government organizations. Other than that it looks good.