User:TROLLSworldtour/Flowers of sulfur/Kyraa.lien Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

TROLLSworldtour


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TROLLSworldtour/Flowers_of_sulfur?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Flowers of sulfur

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead has been updated, but not to reflect the new content added. The addition to the lead provides an insight to another potential contribution to the article, but the actual changes that have been currently made are not presented in the lead. The lead overall is very concise, though it does not briefly describe the article’s general sections. Rather, the lead serves as a general introduction to the topic and a description of what flowers of sulfur is. The content added is relevant to the topic. Some of the additions are general information while the contribution to the “Uses” section is more of a recent development. However, the content added to the “Production” section seems out of place, as the new information is in regards to chemical properties not chemical production.

A neutral tone is present throughout the contributions to this article. No claims lead heavily in any direction, nor is the writing trying to convince me of anything. The tone of voice seems very appropriate for a Wikipedia article. New content added has been appropriately cited by seemingly reliable sources, though it appears that two of the citations are the same (Issacs, Zhang, & Munson). The sources are relevant to the topic, are up to date, and are properly linked. Structurally, the article is divided into understandable categories, but the content needs to be slightly shifted around to be properly fit into each category.