User:Tacovilla17/Rolando Hinojosa-Smith/ClaudiaVargasRamirez Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tacovilla17


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tacovilla17/Rolando_Hinojosa-Smith?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rolando Hinojosa-Smith

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall there has been a very good formulation of the added details to the sections that clearly miss a lot of information such as information on early life. I appreciate the organization of the article as the current article only has very bullet point style settings which can be difficult to follow along and unengaging. So far, I believe that this author has done a good job exciting filling in the content gaps and making the overall context of the article more cohesive and organized overall. I appreciate that the author has added the different sections of the article making it easier to find information rather than vaguely making titles. This is something that I will be taking and using for my personal article as well. Furthermore, I think that this article does a good job with linking coinciding with the information that links to the context of the time which I think that is very helpful! Your tone is very neutral which is good, and your references are organized in a very useful manner.

Something that might help going forward in continuing the article, I think it will be helpful to continue the organizational patterns that are being used so far. The information that has been added is good I would continue to use these tactics to spruce up the article. I saw that the original article had a photo, maybe try incorporating more if that is possible as it seems that Hinojosa is still alive. I would maybe include more information about his time in the Korean War and go into a bit more detail. I am not completely sure of how many sources you are planning to use but I think that the distribution of the ones that you have managed to use thus far makes the text seem well-rounded and well-researched, I would maybe consider adding more depending on the length of information that you are wishing to add to the article. Overall, I think that you are doing a great job given the lack of information that is present before you began to edit the article. You have a very solid foundation to continue to build on as the semester continues! I look forward to reading your next updates!

Claudia Vargas-Ramirez