User:Tactfulsitta82/Ottoman miniature/Livelygoose Peer Review

General info
(Tactfulsitta82)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Tactfulsitta82/Ottoman miniature
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ottoman miniature

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

LEAD - There is no changes in the very first paragraph, but the second has amazing background information.

CONTENT - Very good facts presented that were not already there. Truly does add to the subject. I think you've added a lot to fill in a gap.

TONE AND BALANCE - I think the first paragraph you added does sound a little like an argument. You do remain neutral but still trying to prove something to the reader. Could just be your writing style and it is hard to rephrase the info you have there, but maybe there is a way you could take away the phrase "it is important to..."

SOURCES AND REFERENCES - Looks good! You have so many sources/footnotes and it looks reliable and well informed.

ORGANIZATION - I think it flows very well and easy to read.