User:Tahliafarr/Gemstone/Yaatch Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tahliafarr


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tahliafarr/Gemstone?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gemstone

Evaluate the drafted changes
Tahliafarr added a subsection to the section "Treatment", where there's a short description of what are the common treatments for gemstones and a longer characterization for bleaching gemstones.

The content added serves as a good complement for the original article, especially the introductory paragraph to the section. It expands the original and adds important information. On the other hand, the description of bleaching mentions "Acid", but does not specify which one. Aside from that, the added content is fairly similar in level of detail to the others subsections of "Treatment".

The new section uses only one source (the Geological Institute of America's website). Although the institution is respected, going to sources published on peer-reviewed journals would provide a more representative description of the technique. One suggestion is to search for a recent review on the topic on scientific journals (ex. "The Journal of Gemmology"), and not depend on a single source.

The image included helps in understanding the bleaching treatment, but a more schematic representation of the processes described in the whole section "Treatments" would be more useful for undestanding.

Overall, the added text improves the amount of detail on the article, but it still lacks detail and a diversity of sources. Reviewing other sources and summarizing them in the text would greatly improve the article, as well as editing the lead section to refer to the "Treatments".