User:Takayuki Toyama/Choose an Article

Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Water cycle
 * Article Evaluation
 * Lead Section
 * I think the leading sentence is concise and understandable.
 * I think some sentences in the section is too descriptive. In the explanation of water cycle' effect on climate, for example, it says that "When water evaporates, it takes up energy from its surroundings and cools the environment. When it condenses, it releases energy and warms the environment." I think this explanation is too detailed.
 * Also, it doesn't include the overview of the article. I think it should include it.
 * Content
 * I think it can cover more about the effects on humans.
 * Tone and Balance
 * I think the tone of the article is quite neutral.
 * Sources and References
 * I think almost all the sources come from reliable, scholarly works.
 * Organization and writing quality
 * I think the writing quality is good, but the organization is a little complicated. For example, the Description part starts from a detailed explanation of the water cycle and lacks the overall introduction. I think it should be more organized putting a flow from introduction to content.
 * Image and Media
 * I think it should touch on the videos included in the article. Currently, there is no mention to the videos, so the media is a little disconnected in the article.
 * The image included in the Processes section is pretty helpful to understand the water cycle processes
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * The last post was three years ago. Taking the importance of the article into account, this frequency of updating article is not healthy.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp some factors and processes of water cycle. I thought it might be better to include the overall description of water cycle processes. In addition, I want to see the connection between the water cycle and humanity or other animals. The topic may be another section to be included.

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Option 2

 * Water supply
 * Article Evaluation
 * Lead Section
 * I think the lead section is well-detailed, but it lacks the brief description of the subsequent sections.
 * Content
 * The data on number of people who have access to clean water is from research in 2010. It is more than ten years ago so it is better to update the data on the number.
 * I think it is better to have more detailed description in the History section. Now there is only one sentence.
 * Tone and Balance
 * I felt that the tone is neutral.
 * Sources and References
 * In the "Institutional responsibility and governance" section, there are few citations (it is clearly marked as the section which needs more citations).
 * I think there should be data on the costs of water supply in developing countries in Financial aspects - Costs and financing section.
 * Organization and writing quality
 * I think this article is well-organized, but there might be more sections to be added. <<< Need to reevaluate
 * Image and Media
 * I think it is better to put more images in the "Institutional responsibility and governance" section. Now it is hard to read because there is few illustrations or photographs.
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * I think the Talk Page is active and there is a decent manner.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I think I was able to gain the current water supply system. I may want to know more about the problems in the water supply system in the world.


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Option 3

 * Groundwater
 * Article Evaluation
 * Lead Section
 * I think the lead section is helpful to grasp the main idea of the article.
 * Content
 * I think the content covers important points of view. I thought a little about including the History section.
 * There was a mention to the groundwater in Mars. I am not sure whether it should be included or not.
 * Tone and Balance
 * I think the tone is neutral.
 * Regarding the Regulation section, there is room to improve its cover because the countries cited as examples are the U.S., Canada, and India, which lack the variety.
 * Sources and References
 * I think this article basically include many reliable sources, but there is also several sources that might be unreliable.
 * Organization and writing quality
 * Image and Media
 * I think the images put in the article help the readers' understanding.
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * The last post on the Talk Page was three years ago. There should be more discussion on this article.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to get to know more about groundwater after reading this article. I think the balance between the natural aspect and the use aspect can be improved more. I thought the natural aspect can be expanded by adding groundwater's history and also the use aspect have room to add more information.
 * I think the images put in the article help the readers' understanding.
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * The last post on the Talk Page was three years ago. There should be more discussion on this article.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to get to know more about groundwater after reading this article. I think the balance between the natural aspect and the use aspect can be improved more. I thought the natural aspect can be expanded by adding groundwater's history and also the use aspect have room to add more information.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to get to know more about groundwater after reading this article. I think the balance between the natural aspect and the use aspect can be improved more. I thought the natural aspect can be expanded by adding groundwater's history and also the use aspect have room to add more information.
 * Overall, I was able to get to know more about groundwater after reading this article. I think the balance between the natural aspect and the use aspect can be improved more. I thought the natural aspect can be expanded by adding groundwater's history and also the use aspect have room to add more information.


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Option 4

 * Tap water
 * Article Evaluation
 * Lead Section
 * The lead sentence is concise and helpful to understand.
 * It includes the information that is not mentioned in the following section: the lead section included the history of tap water's development, but there is no section talking about its history.
 * There is no mention to the content of Fixture and appliances section,
 * Content
 * The content that can be added
 * I think there should be a section about the history of tap water. It is also better to include the information on the current prevalence of tap water in the world. (This article has an absence of information of historically unrepresented populations.)
 * The connection between tap water & water supply or sanitation, the comparison between tap water & other forms of water supply such as rivers or lakes
 * The content that can be modified
 * "Background"... this section contains the connection between tap water and diseases, public health, topic of fluoridation. I think the headline of "background" is inappropriate (it's too broad and it makes me imagine the content about history).
 * The description of materials used for taps doesn't come from reliable sources. It comes from a website talking about the plumbing.
 * There was a banner that notified the potential irrelevant information. "Portable Water Supply"... The content of this section needs to be reconsidered.
 * Adding other countries' examples to the regulation section and the comparison to bottled water section.
 * Finding a reliable source about the materials used for tap water or plumbing.
 * Adding images.
 * government website...?
 * civil organization...?
 * contents that lacks backing sources
 * history, other water resources?, fixtures and appliance section, the latter part of the potable water supply section.
 * Tone and Balance
 * The examples are primarily from the United States, and it can't be said that the article includes the worldwide view.
 * The information is mainly about the current world, and lacks the perspective of historical development of tap water.
 * I don't think the sentences are biased or opinionated.
 * Sources and References
 * There are some sources that are not reliable, such as a website that looks organized by an ordinary individual.
 * I was not able to trace some of the sources because there were no valid link in those references. I think this issue relates to the credibility of those sources.
 * The oldest source is a book published in 1994.
 * government website...?
 * civil organization...?
 * Organization and writing quality
 * I felt that the sentences in this article were easy to understand for me.
 * The sections which has enough information have a good organization. The other sections have a lack of information and a poor organization.
 * Image and Media
 * There are no images or pictures other than the representative image in the leading section. It is better to include more images to visually support the readers' understanding.
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * There was a recent discussion in last May.
 * This article is the following interest of WikiProject.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp what kind of aspects I can consider about tap water. However, I thought that there was still the information bias to the specific country or to the current world.
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * There was a recent discussion in last May.
 * This article is the following interest of WikiProject.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp what kind of aspects I can consider about tap water. However, I thought that there was still the information bias to the specific country or to the current world.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp what kind of aspects I can consider about tap water. However, I thought that there was still the information bias to the specific country or to the current world.
 * Overall, I was able to grasp what kind of aspects I can consider about tap water. However, I thought that there was still the information bias to the specific country or to the current world.

potable water, water pipe, water distribution, Journal of Water & Health,
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Option 5

 * Dry toilet
 * Article Evaluation
 * Lead Section
 * I think overall the leading section is effective to introduce the topic of dry toilet.
 * I think the leading section includes too-detailed information. It cites examples of types of dry toilet, and it is too detailed. On the other hand, it lacks the reference to some contents in the article such as the history of dry toilet.
 * Content
 * In the Use section, there is no mention to the use in emergency situations. I think the dry toilet's use in the emergency situation is one of the most representative examples.
 * Tone and Balance
 * I think the tone is neutral.
 * In the history section, the examples were only from the U.K. and Australia. It is better to include the history in other parts on the world (source needed).
 * Sources and References
 * Some sentences lack references and are marked as "citation needed."
 * Organization and writing quality
 * I think the organization and the writing quality is good.
 * Image and Media
 * The Gallery part in the Types section is helpful to understand the variety of dry toilets. However, there is room of improvements such as connecting those examples with the preceding contents.
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * There are only 6 threads in the Talk Page. It is better to have more discussions on this article.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp better what dry toilet is, but there is room to add significant information further.
 * The Gallery part in the Types section is helpful to understand the variety of dry toilets. However, there is room of improvements such as connecting those examples with the preceding contents.
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * There are only 6 threads in the Talk Page. It is better to have more discussions on this article.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp better what dry toilet is, but there is room to add significant information further.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp better what dry toilet is, but there is room to add significant information further.
 * Overall, I was able to grasp better what dry toilet is, but there is room to add significant information further.


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