User:Takayuki Toyama/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Water cycle

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
Because I have interest in the SDG6 "Ensure availability and sustainable management of water and sanitation for all," and I imagined that droughts or water shortages come from not only the absence of infrastructures but also the climate effect caused by the imbalance of water cycle and so forth.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)


 * Lead Section
 * I think the leading sentence is concise and understandable.
 * I think some sentences in the section is too descriptive. In the explanation of water cycle' effect on climate, for example, it says that "When water evaporates, it takes up energy from its surroundings and cools the environment. When it condenses, it releases energy and warms the environment." I think this explanation is too detailed.
 * Also, it doesn't include the overview of the article. I think it should include it.
 * Content
 * I think it can cover more about the effects on humans.
 * Tone and Balance
 * I think the tone of the article is quite neutral.
 * Sources and References
 * I think almost all the sources come from reliable, scholarly works.
 * Organization and writing quality
 * I think the writing quality is good, but the organization is a little complicated. For example, the Description part starts from a detailed explanation of the water cycle and lacks the overall introduction. I think it should be more organized putting a flow from introduction to content.
 * Image and Media
 * I think it should touch on the videos included in the article. Currently, there is no mention to the videos, so the media is a little disconnected in the article.
 * The image included in the Processes section is pretty helpful to understand the water cycle processes
 * Talk Page Discussion
 * The last post was three years ago. Taking the importance of the article into account, this frequency of updating article is not healthy.
 * Overall Impression
 * Overall, I was able to grasp some factors and processes of water cycle. I thought it might be better to include the overall description of water cycle processes. In addition, I want to see the connection between the water cycle and humanity or other animals. The topic may be another section to be included.