User:Tamashi2314/Feminine hygiene/Teague Sloane Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tamashi2314


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Tamashi2314/Feminine hygiene
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Feminine hygiene

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead- don't forget to update the article lead once you publish your work.
 * Content- all of your content is very relevant to the article and really begins to create more of an actual History section to this article. One area you may be able to add in the history section, could outline the different demographics of feminine product use and access, as well as influences based on race and culture.
 * Tone and Balance- Your writing is professional and neutral. It provides information without any attempts at persuasion.
 * Sources- Your sources and use of their information is accurate and consistent.
 * Organization- In your environmental impacts paragraph last couple sentences could reworded to read a little easier. I put a suggestion below, I left the content alone and just proposed a few transitions to help it read a little more cohesive.

Current:

The average age of menarche is 12 years old and women continue to through their menstrual cycles until the average age of fifty when their body enters menopause. A single woman throws out the annual 250-300 pounds of feminine hygiene products for 38 years. 38 years of feminine hygiene waste for one woman is 62,415 pounds of feminine hygiene products.

Reword:

The average age of menarche is 12 years old and women continue to menstruate until the average age of fifty, when their body enters menopause. That means the average woman will dispose of 250-300 pounds of feminine hygiene products for 38 years. Over those 38 years, a single woman will have disposed of approximately 62,415 pounds of feminine hygiene products.


 * Overall Impression- I believe all of your content will add value to the article, in-fact, your Activism section begins to fill a big gap in the Society and Culture portion of the main article.  Your use of wikipedia is excellent in creating visually organized work, and most importantly rich in content.