User:Tamurray22/Sit-in movement/Social Movement Explorer Peer Review

General info
Tamurray22 and Jimmerferdet32
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/courses/Augustana_University/HIST_121_-_U.S._History_since_1877_(Spring_2024)/home
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sit-in movement :

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?

Tone and Balance:
 * I like the addition of information you added in the first section of the article. Adding content on who led the Greensboro sit-ins was very beneficial to this article because it provides more context and information to the driving force behind the movement. Great minor edit!
 * The content added in the major edit is very beneficial to the overall article. I like that you mentioned the significance of sit-ins in the years following the civil rights movement. Specific mentioning of the "Jail, No Bail" strategy is a great addition of specific information on this topic.

Is the content added neutral?


 * One of the biggest strengths of your additions to this page is the neutrality of the content you added. You found a way to add in necessary information on the sit-in movement, while maintaining an educational and informative tone. Each addition gave further insight into the topic that sheds light on specific components of the sit-in strike.

Sources and references:

Is all new content backed up by a reliable source of information?


 * Good addition of a source in the first section of the article
 * Under your major edit, make sure to identity any sources you used to come up with information on the Friendship Junior College and the "Jail, No Bail" strategy
 * One of the minor edits you could make to this article could be the addition of more sources to support the second section of the article.

Organization:

Is the content added well-written?


 * The edits made were well organized and matched the purpose of the article. The major edit, in particular, is very well thought out and provides thorough and concise information.
 * One specific edit:
 * "The students were then arrested and refused to pay bail. This was part of their "Jail, No Bail" strategy, they instead decided to serve jail time as a demonstration of their commitment to the civil rights movement."
 * To make this section more clear, I would recommend splitting it up into one more sentence if necessary. For example; "The students were then arrested and refused to pay bail, as a part of their "Jail, No Bail" strategy. Because of this, they decided to serve jail time as a demonstration of their commitment to the civil rights movement."

Overall Impressions:


 * Overall, the edits made were solid. The addition of information in the introductory section, as well as the major edit, gives this article more specific information to work off of, which is very beneficial to the overall flow. My main recommendations would be to add more references, specifically in the second section and in your major edit. I would also recommend adjusting the phrasing in the last sentence of your major edit. Great job finding all of this useful information to add to the existing article!