User:Tanneleo023/The Big Sea/MoBMila Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tanneleo023


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tanneleo023/The_Big_Sea?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think your lead contains all the perfect information but the language should be more concise, and less opinionated. Besides that, I think you did a great job of addressing topics that will be covered later in the article, Given that there is not much content yet, I can only really say that yes, this article will do a great job at addressing equity gaps within Wikipedia. Including the Wood quote was a great choice but I would be wary of telling readers how it should be interpreted. While your current content is neutral, try not to insert personal opinions or understandings and focus on what your sources tell you. On the topic of sources, all your links work and they come from consistent and reliable places. All statements are also cited correctly and in the proper format (though I also wonder how to cite a source that is used frequently throughout the whole article, in my own project).

As you have outlined, the organization looks good. Avoid run on sentences and convoluted language, stick to a more matter-of-fact tone rather than one that might be used in essay writing. I loved your inclusion of an image, and it seems the caption is a work in progress so that should be fine too! Because this is a new article you guys have a unique job of including as much of the surrounding literature as you can. As of now it seems you could benefit from a few more sources, but obviously it is early in the project and we all have a ways to go. Overall, I think you're on the right track and I'm excited to see how this article progresses.