User:Tantallon99/Choose an Article

Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Article title
 * Ottoman Architecture in Egypt
 * Article Evaluation:Overall, the article is well-written and informed, but needs more depth. The citations are correct, and there is no noticeable bias in the writing. Throughout the article, numerous perspectives are addressed, and there are no severe gaps in equity, but improvements could be made discussing the effects of the architecture on the various groups of the region.
 * Sources
 * https://www.al-monitor.com/originals/2019/11/ottoman-monuments-in-egypt-to-be-renovated.html
 * https://www.webpages.uidaho.edu/arch499/nonwest/cairo/ottoman_period.htm
 * Bates, Ulku U. “Two ottoman documents on architects in Egypt.” Muqarnas, vol. 3, 1985, p. 121, https://doi.org/10.2307/1523088.

Option 2

 * Article title:Mastaba
 * Article Evaluation:The article is relatively unbiased, but is largely lacking in depth and has some issues that need to be addressed. It relies heavily on direct quotations, which should definitely be fixed.  It also neglects to put the mastabas in context- while the periods when they were built is mentioned, there is no real frame of reference for their construction.  There are some minor issues with diction, and the religious importance of the structures seems a bit undermined.
 * Sources:Cooke, Ashley. The Architecture of Mastaba Tombs in the Unas Cemetery. Sidestone Press, 2020.::Snape, Steven R. Ancient Egyptian Tombs: The Culture of Life and Death. Wiley-Blackwell, 2010.:Teeter, Emily. Religion and Ritual in Ancient Egypt. Cambridge Univ. Press, 2012.

Option 3

 * Article title:Tantallon Castle
 * Article Evaluation:The article is largely unbiased, and does a great job of covering the architectural elements of the castle. It seems like the lead statement could be rearranged a bit, as it has a disproportionate amount of historic fact inside of it.  The article appears to have been untouched for around a decade, so the sources are quite old.  Within that time, more has been discovered about the castle which should be added. It also has a section about the ghost lore of the castle, but no stories are mentioned.
 * Sources:https://www.bbc.com/news/uk-scotland-edinburgh-east-fife-34199052 :https://canmore.org.uk/site/56630/tantallon-castle :https://knightstemplar.co/tantallon-castle-ghost-stories-medieval-grandeur/

Option 4

 * Article title:Nubian Architecture
 * Article Evaluation:The article is unbiased, but severely lacking in detail. There is especially little about the transitions to Christianity and later Islam in the area, and none about how it has involved into the modern era.  The lead statement is incredibly vague and short.  It has not been updated for quite a while, and the sources are all rather old.
 * Sources:Adenstedt, Ingrid. Reconstructing Pharaonic Architecture in Nubia: The Case Study of Sav1, Sai Island. Austrian Academy of Sciences, 2017.:Mahmoud Bayoumi, Ola Ali. “Nubian Vernacular Architecture & Contemporary Aswan Buildings’ enhancement.” Alexandria Engineering Journal, vol. 57, no. 2, 2018, pp. 875–883, https://doi.org/10.1016/j.aej.2016.01.002 .:Mileto, Camilla, et al. Vernacular and Earthen Architecture: Conservation and Sustainability. CRC Press, 2018.:

Option 5

 * Article title:Temple of Dendur
 * Article Evaluation:The article is well-written, and most of the important information about the temple is present. However, a significant addendum is necessary in the early history of the temple- while it is mentioned, it is extremely brief.  Some additional information could be added to the section about the architectural elements of the temple, as well as some edits to grammar.  It also is mostly written from a Western viewpoint, and attention to other voices should be added.  However, it has been reviewed fairly recently, so the sources are up to date.
 * Sources:Peters, Erin A. “Coloring the temple of dendur.” Metropolitan Museum Journal, vol. 53, 2018, pp. 8–23, https://doi.org/10.1086/701737 .:Peters, Erin A. “Dendur and Deleuze: The becoming-icon of American Egyptology at the met.” Archaeologies, vol. 19, no. 1, 2023, pp. 83–103, https://doi.org/10.1007/s11759-023-09474-5 .:SCHORK, R. J. “The Dendur Temple in New York: The Gallus Connection.” Arion: A Journal of the Humanities and the Classics, vol. 18, no. 3, 2010, pp. 93–105, https://doi.org/10.1353/arn.2010.0025.