User:Tate Johnson1/Mary Jung/Hkrage22 Peer Review

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Tate Johnson1


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I think this is a good start to the Mary Jung page. I think you could go more in depth at what she did to help the causes. Some questions to maybe answer in your Wikipedia article. Like what did her, Karen, and Jane do to address issues in of 9to5? And what made her want to work for the 9to5 organization? Did Mary work another job the whole time she was working for 9to5? I would just work on adding more content in the article. You have a good overall understanding of what she was involved in while working at 9to5. Your sources seem very reliable and up to date.